Aceline Diamondthrop of D.1

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Name: Aceline (Ace- lean) Star Diamondthrop. Princess Aceline, as she prefers.
Age: 15.
Gender: Female
District/Area: {District 1|}
Appearance:

Beautiful in a kind of exotic way. Long caramel colored hair that she wraps with a ribbon in a sort of braid or lets loose behind a hairband. Green almond shaped eyes with a brown circles around the pupil and iris.Small buttony nose, and generally an elfish face. Not pale, but not tan either, with a body trim and muscular from her training. Petite, 5 feet exactly. Light and quick, especially with knives. She has a birthmark on her left upper arm shaped like a star,but she doesn't like it and tries to hide it with long-sleeved shirts or an armband. Wears a green silken vest with a floral pattern every single day, usually with a shirt and leggings.

Personality:

Quite gossipy. Likes to know everything about everyone, but she knows when to tell a secret and when not to tell, so everyone trusts her. Despises things like training and adores drawing (though she isn't very good), swimming in the training pool, and hiding from her parents in the library. She has a ditsy, sweet, flirty demeanor that masks a wicked side determined to win against all odds. Can be deceitful, and is naturally cunning. She lacks vigilance, however, and tends to be impulsive.

History:

Her name means of noble birth, and for good reason. Her father is the mayor and her great-grandfather was the president before the rebellion. Her mother was a former victor of the games, and wishes for her daughter to carry on the tradition. Now that she is 15 she is expected by her parents to volunteer.

Codeword: Muttations
Comments/Other:

She likes to be called Princess. If you want to live, do so! Also she can wrap any human being around her finger. The odds are definitely in Princess Aceline's favour.

[Sunrise Rainier D2 // [Thundy]]

It's required that you have at least two paragraphs for appearance and at least three for personality and history. Add more information, and then I'll take another look.

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Name: Aceline (Ace- lean) Star Diamondthrop. Princess Aceline, as she prefers.
Age: 15.
Gender: Female
District/Area: 1
Appearance:

Beautiful in a kind of exotic way. She has long caramel colored hair that she wraps with a ribbon in a sort of braid or lets loose behind a hairband.
Also, green almond shaped eyes with brown circles around the pupil and iris. A small buttony nose, pointed chin. Long eyelashes accentuated by thick egyptian- style liner.

Sort of tan, with a body trim and muscular from her training. She has long fingers and small feet. Petite, 5 feet exactly. Light and quick, especially with knives. She has a birthmark on her left upper arm shaped like a star,but she doesn't like it and tries to hide it with long-sleeved shirts or an armband.

Wears a green silken vest with a floral pattern every single day, usually with a shirt and leggings. Doesn't like high heeled shoes, boots, or orange clothes. When she has to dress up though, Aceline is very frilly and fashionable. Like a princess. She wears floaty skirts and ruffly tops, but
no dresses.

Personality:

Quite gossipy. Likes to learn as much as she can about people she meets, but she knows when to tell a secret and when not to tell, so most people trust her. She is District one's very own Gossip Queen. Aceline despises structured things like training and adores drawing
(though she isn't very good), swimming in the training pool, and hiding from her parents in the library.
She sort of dances when she walks, especially when she's happy.

She has a sweet, flirty demeanor that masks a wicked side determined to win against all odds. Can be deceitful, and is naturally cunning.
Quite imperious and demanding if given the authority. Defiant and independent, she longs to be free of her boring old district. But, if she has to be, she can pretend to be friendly, bubbly and utterly charming.

The time she spends in the library will pay off, because she knows alot about the history of the hunger games and all the tips and tricks used in the arena, edible bugs and berries, healing herbs, all that stuff.
She lacks vigilance, however, and tends to be impulsive. She doesn't like to admit her mistakes, but she will always help people in need.

History:

Her name means of noble birth, and for good reason. Her father, Wonder Diamondthrop, is the mayor and her great-grandfather was the president before the rebellion. He is a very strict and demanding man that doesn't really understand Aceline, but he believes her to be the greatest warrior
of her generation and is secretly proud of her.

Her mother was a former victor of the games, Sparkle Diamondthrop, nee DeLenoire. She wishes for her daughter to carry on the tradition. Like her husband, she believes that her daughter is a wonderful little angel.
She tends to spoil Aceline a bit, something that her husband doesn't always agree to. Now that she is 15 she is expected by her parents to volunteer.

She has a sister named Silk who is 3. Silk is very loud and grumpy, and totally spoiled. Her parents consider letting someone adopt the girl, because no one can stand her. Aceline doesn't really get along with silk too much. Silk spends her days in the Preschool.


Codeword: muttations
Comments/Other:

She likes to be called Princess. If you want to live, do so! Also she can wrap just about anybody around her finger. The odds are definitely in Princess Aceline's favour.

[Prince Inigo]

Please break up the blocks of text into spaced sections to make it easier on the eyes.

From what I'm seeing, the History would be two paragraphs. (I'm assuming you only hit enter once, so please excuse me if this is wrong). Expound on it, please.

Appearance will be two paragraphs; Personality will be three; History will be three. Five sentences per paragraph. ^^ To make these paragraphs nice and long, it's recommended for them to be in complete sentences.

Now for a bit of nit-picking. (Please excuse me).

Likes to know everything about everyone, but she knows when to tell a secret and when not to tell, so everyone trusts her

It's best not to generalize the masses in the interest of not including another RPer's character. By saying "everyone", you are including someone like another D1 char might easily trust yours, which you are uncertain of. It's best to avoid this generalization and say "a lot of people" or "many".

Also she can wrap any human being around her finger.

Same deal as above.

You don't have to re-submit the application. Just reply saying you changed things after modifying the application and we'll look at it again. Please do so and we'll swing by!

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fixed it. is she approved yet?

[Prince Inigo]

Better! Accepted.