Aquamarine District 9 [Done]

[Sakura]

Name: Aquamarine Sky
Age: 16
Gender: Female
District/Area: District 9
Appearance:

Aquamarine, nicknamed "Aqua" by some people, is a pale skinned girl with whispy bleach blond hair.
She keeps her hair tied back in a loose brilliant blue ribbon, always.
Her name represents the brilliant color of her eyes.
They are beautiful, almond shaped and always full of curiosity.
She wears a homemade skirt, attached only at the sides.
Its short and a pale blue green color.
Her top is a soft material, the same color as her skirt, and strapless.
She wears sandal like shoes, held to her foot with faded blue ribbons.
Shes quite small, and skinny, although not starving.
She is the height of a 10 year old, but is an excellent at being quick.

Personality:

She is a quiet girl, always happy and sweet to all those around her.
She loves the summer time and welcomes it with open arms, when all the prey come out to play.
She loves hunting and feels proud to be part of district nine.
Aquamarine often shows off, going after the biggest and fatest prey availible.
She is skilled with almost any killing tool that is availible to kill prey.
She works best with either knives and her hands, or a bow.
She can use other items too, like spears, or her bare hands alone.
Aquamarine is quick of her feet and often practices her agility skills to keep it up.
Aquamarine doesnt think much of the capitol, but makes the best of the hungergames, using the techniques and skills/traps etc for her own use.
By the way she has so much pride for her hunting skills, and killing, youd think she is a heartless evil girl.
She is quite the opposite.
She hunts better then the rest of her family and is the obvious hunter of the bunch.

History:

Aquamarine was born late, although the size of a premature baby.
Her family feared she would die shortly, being so small and weak, but her heart never failed to beat.
Aqua begin to grow little bits at a time as she got older, becoming stronger and gaining a proper immune system.
At the age of 10 she got into the hunting stuff district nine is known for and after little effort, was bringing home the good stuff.
Aquamarine does illigal hunting at times to put food on the table for her many younger brothers, since alot of her kill was taken by the capitol.
At 11 her name was pulled out of the girls box for the hunger games, but was quickly dismissed and waved off when they corrected her current age, and another girls name was pulled.
She cried that night, for the girl whos name was chosen in her place. If her name hadnt been in the way, it would have been another girls paper, and her closest friend would not have been chosen for the games.
To this day she still remembers mary's face as she stepped onto the stage , and the moment she saw she had been hit down with a knife.
Lest we forget.
And she never has forgotten.

Codeword: muttations
Comments/Other:

Choo Chooo

[[Ree]craft]

You're doing great, just a few pointers:

-Double space between each paragraph like so:

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gfdhl;ajgkgfkallg blahbalbhalbha

-Could you not do your bio in list form. Like, have a paragraph about her eyes, a paragraph about her hair, a paragraph about her body shape, a paragraph about what she wears, etc.

-In appearance please add descriptions to the shape of her face. High cheek bones? Pointed chin? etc.

-Most of the personality talks about what she's like with weapons. Could you make it more about her personality? Does she get angry often? If no, than who ticks her off most? What does she hate, what does she love? Is she carefree, or a bit more thoughtful?

-You use "stuff" a lot in history. Try and be more specific?

-Could you describe her childhood a little more thoroughly? What friends did she have? Did she create any enemies? Was she once rich or always poor?

-Her name would not have been chosen at the reaping. Her friend could've been picked, but not her.

You're doing well. I've just got a high standard.