Kiran Attra-District 6

[Kiran Attra]

Name: Kiran Attra
Age: 17
Gender: Female
District/Area: District 6
Appearance:

Kiran is medium height at 5 feet 4 inches. She has wavy, shoulder length, brown hair and bright emerald green eyes. She's slightly tan but not as intense as Eskimo or Indian. Her eyes are tilted slightly upward and she has a round, gentle face. She has high cheek bones and a sleek nose.

Her lips are regular sized but very red and her bangs fall into her eyes constantly. She isn't skinny but not fat either. She is slightly curvy in a healthy way. She has long legs and arms but not disproportional. She has a small frame overall.

Personality:

Kiran is a very complex person. She can be very kind and sweet depeneding on the person. She constantly cares for those who are weaker or need her help. She has a kindness for animals and constantly befriends people. This sweetness is rare however because in the current time period, kindness doesnt help you live.

She has learned to care for herself and therefore is very independant. She is insanely competitve and hates failure to the point that it tears her apart. She strives for perfection and will do anything to acheive it. Her key characteristic is her intelligence. She is the most intelligent in her town (among children).

She loves figuring out puzzles and finding patterns. Kiran loves to set goals for herself and then achieve them. She makes friends easily but has a hard time keeping them due to her superior intellect and overall personality. Her main flaws would be her self deprecation and her self absorbed nature. Because of this she developes only mediocre social skills which provides yet another flaw.

History:

Kiran's father was a scientist at a local laboratory near where she lived. Kiran was always curious about what he had done that day or what he had learned. At a very young age Kiran was learning chemistry and biology. She was facinated by the information and constantly asked her father to teach her something else. Her mother stayed at home and kept up the home.

Kiran was an only child and therefore had all her parents attention. At age 7, Kiran's world was shaken. An explosion at the lab had cost her father his life. Now, fatherless and deeply mourning, Kiran threw herself into her studies and tried to make up for the loss of a father figure with books and studying. She developed a few good friends to which she could talk to but nothing like the relationship she had with her father developed.
Her mother, distraught yet determined to keep life normal, helped Kiran to do her best and encouraged her. Despite the possible dangers, at age 15, Kiran enlisted as a lab aid at the newly built laboratory. She had never felt as at home as she did there. She quickly rose above the normal ranks for teenage workers and was offered an actual job doing research which she quickly accepted. She provides for her mother with her paycheck and therefore her mother doesn't have to get a job of her own.

Codeword: odair
Comments/Other:

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Hi. Let's begin this review with some good aspects. First, you managed to write the necessary amount of paragraphs. That's a very good thing. Second, you included a flaw in her personality. Also a good thing.

However, when I read through the appearance, I saw that there was no major flaw or any minor flaws. Remember, this character is human; there is some part about this character's appearance that must be bad or at least detract from her beauty. Also, if you expand on your character's appearance, that would be great. It gives yourself and fellow RP-ers more to work with when they have a better image of who your character is.

Second thing is about the research job that your character holds. I know on personal experience that a teenager holding a research job is not going to be able to support a household. It doesn't matter how good they are; they still won't have a big enough paycheck to support a family even of two. And even if she was rising through the ranks, research jobs are always given to the most experienced, then it trickles down. So the chances of her being offered a regular job as a researcher is slim. Probably an assistant at best. Even in this world, students going through residency are not considered researchers but rather lab assistants. Just a thought to have.

Mainly, I would like it if you could expand more on your character app. We like to look for more on your character so we can know your character. Go into depth for several aspects about this character. It gives more definition to who she is.

When you have fixed up your app, please respond so we can look at it again.