Phoenixx Bauers--- Wanderer

[willowdawn]

Name: Nixx Bauers
Age: 17
Gender: Female
District/Area: Wanderer
Appearance:

Nixx is average height for her age. She is skinny due to malnutrition and her ever wondering soul. She is tan skinned with dark brown hair, near black that curls when it gets wet and is naturally straight. Her eyes are the color of sapphires, deep blue like the ocean. She is also covered in freckles, from her face to her shoulders and stomach.
She wears whatever she can make or snatch from other districts while noone else is around. She is a dirt magnet as she crawls through small caves or climbs high in the trees to escape dangers high and low. She also wears her mother's pearl pendant in remembrance of her once close knit family.

Personality:

She has a deep case of depression but pushes through it, day-to-day. her mind protects her from herself by changing the person that she really is. Not a personality disorder, just fear for who she really is.
Her feelings are hers alone, she shares them with only the air around her. She sings to the birds although she doesnt have all that great of a voice. Her voice is also average, girly but rough. She talks in a southern accent whenever she meets anyone. She doesnt give her real identity to anyone either.
She is envied by many passers by for her astonishing good looks, yet she feels that she is nothing but average. Nixx is perfectly healthy aside from her depression and her addiction to pain.

History:

Nixx is forever haunted by her past. She lost her mother to a pack of wild dogs near district 12 when she was about 7 years old.. After that, Phoenixx's father wasn't the same person at all, he became bitter and angry.
Her father was separated from her back near District 12 when a wild boar was chasing them. Her father ran and Phoenixx climbed the nearest tree. She keeps looking for him to no avail.
Nixx fell in love with the outdoors while searching for her father. She feels that he is still out here, just waiting or looking for her too.

Codeword: oDa
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[Prince Inigo]

Hey there. ^^

There is a modify button at the top-right of posts just to add in info like you did in the second post. You can eliminate double-posting this way, and it is most preferred to do so. Anyways, aside from that, I need for you to take a look at this guide at #1, #2, (generally) #3, #4, #18 (about the mother and the fish), and #24.

District 4 is a considered Career District, so there is initially some leeway for the citizens of the area. (For example, them being able to be Careers when people are not supposed to have any fighting training prior to the Hunger Games). The mother's punishment seems to be a bit harsh. For what incentive would the Peacekeeper need to brutally kill a mother protecting a child from a poisonous fish? There really is no logic behind this situation; thus, you will need to explain more or change the event for the mother's killing.

I find her a bit of a Mary-Sue because she plays the "I'm-pretty/good-looking-but-modest/secretive" card. Not to mention a little bit of an angst-ridden child. I do understand that perhaps her source of angst is derived from the death of her mother and the separation of her from the father; however, with a lack of explanation and deeper understanding of character emotions, I'm finding it hard to find her nothing more than those two archetypes. I would love for her to be a more complex character, capable of having contradictions to her general personality but keeping true. If she's having a hard time understanding herself as a character, that's fine; but, at this moment, I don't see her. I want to learn more. ;)

Modify your application of the necessary changes and reply back to the thread when ready for another review. Thanks!