Hunter Stevenson D12

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Name: Hunter Stevenson
Age: 18
Gender: Male
District/Area: District 12
Appearance:

Hunter is about a 76" man. His face is covered in freckles. His eyes are dark brown and he is a red head. His nose is a bit disfigured by being crooked from an injury he got a few years ago. One of his front teeth is missing from the same injury.

He has light olive skin with a few tans. His body is thin from a couple of years of little food. Most of the time he wears his miner clothes. Style is not important in his life. He has hair covering his arms and legs. Also he keeps his hair a very short buzz cut.

Most of the time his face is covered in coal dust from the mines. In a bet he lost he had to cut his nails into spikes. His shoe size is about a 14 it is hard for him to get shoes. His feet are hard from the days in the mines. No tattos or pirceings are on him.

Personality:

Hunter is a very shy person. Most of the time he runs from fights. He is fast from running all the time. His sense of humor is good and hey enjoys joking around with his friends. One of his biggest flaws is that he doesn't make friends easily. Another thing he is interested in is ways coal can be used for.

Hunter has average intelligence. He hates ocean because he is afraid of drowning. He fell in a pond when he was young and almost didn't make it out. He enjoys his job as a miner. In his opinion work is worth doing it as long as you make money.

He is very quiet and only speaks when he sees fit. He always puts his friends first when they need him. His favorite place to be is in the dark. He likes the dark because it lets him be quiet and alone for a little bit. The woods scare him from the stories he has heard.

Hunter worries about getting sent to the detention center. He heard that some guy got turned into an avox a couple of months ago. He also heared that the peace keepers are allowed to use anything they have to get them to talk. His first reaction to trouble is that he goes the other way. Sometimes he can be very clummys and trouble finds him. Feeling tall is both good and bad for him because he is glad of it, but he also feels like people always stare at him.

History:

Hunter started to explore around when he could crawl. he was fast to walk, but slow to talk. One of the best pastimes he had was when he saw all the miners going to work because he loved to study all the gear it took to work down there. His parents were madly in love and he had one brother and one sister.

Hunter grew up like most other people in district 12. He grew up in the seam and watched in the miners worked. The older he got the more he liked to walk around and explore. His parents were great and he loved his younger brother.
His younger brother died of yellow fever during the summer three years ago.

He got his injury while he was walking down the street. It was a snowy day and he slipped and BAM he slammed his face into the ground. At the hospital he saw his first dead body and that still haunts him to this day. His nose never healed fully so it is a little crooked. His tooth never grew back either. In his mind that was probably one of the stupidest things he has ever done.

At 18 he joined the mines to help support his family being new he was sent to the new areas of them. It fits his personality to work down there. He stays to him self and eats lunch down in his own zone. He only breaks out of his shell when he needs to help someone injured. Most of the time he has free is spent at home sleeping. His life long wish is to end the hunger games.

With the last to games being won by D12 he is happy that at least two people made it back home. His thoughts on going to the hunger games are terrible, but it could happen. His skills are good for it though he would rather be left out. One of his best friends died in the hunger games so it is a hoorible way of dying to him. He always finds funny how most of the time the odds are never in D12's favor.

Codeword: muttations
Comments/Other:

[Sunrise Rainier D2 // [Thundy]]

All I really have to say is that your paragraphs are very short. Your character has flaws, but you really don't say much about him and this could really use some detail. Add more detail into your sentences and tell us more about your character to lengthen your paragraphs. It's not mandatory, but it would be nice if you would add one or two more paragraphs to each section and give us more information. Once you're finished, reply to this thread and someone will check up on it again.

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I added more info on him.

[Sunrise Rainier D2 // [Thundy]]

Oh, and here's another thing that you need to change that just struck me as odd- 6'7" is not an average height. Just take out the "average" part, because that definitely isn't average.

You added more, yes, but you still need to elaborate a bit about your character. I'm not really asking you to add any new facts about how your character is, exactly.. I'm just asking that you write more about the facts that you already have to go deeper into how your character looks and acts and what happened in his past. What I find to be really helpful is to add your character's opinion about himself and what has happened to him. Okay, he's 6'7". Does that make him feel awkward at times? Or does it make him feel all-powerful and strong because he towers over a lot of people? You have the opportunity to elaborate on a lot of things. I would also advise you to read through Cinder's General Bio Guide as a reference.

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Fixed it up and thanks for the advice Tundy.

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added more

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Just letting you know, 64" is 5 feet 4 inches. So...perhaps you mean 6'4"? It's good otherwise.

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Thanks fixed

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