Eeron Torbor D7

[Spesh]

Name: Eeron
Age: 17
Gender: Male
District/Area: District 7
Appearance:

Eeron Torbor is good sized for his age at 6'2". He has rough olive skin from working at the construction sites in his district. He has broad shoulders and a large chiseled frame. He has sandy blond hair and blue eyes dotted with gold sparks naturally.
Eeron also has a large head with ears that seem to big for him, but help him hear better then a normal person would. He is overall a tough looking young man.
He normally dresses in a wife beater and a pair of baggy jeans. He likes to look very rugged and is not afraid of bad hygiene thanks to all of his work in construction. He has a fairly clear face and soft eyes.

Personality:

Eeron Torbor is a hard individual on the outside, but a nice and understanding individual at heart. He puts immense pressure on himself to be the best and strives for excellence. He tries to be around others most of the time as he does not like being alone.
Eeron has very good hearing and he uses this to his advantage in everyday society, he also has an above average sense of smell, but this is countered by his 20-60 eyesight that makes it hard to see for him. Also, he is a guy who is very gullible and falls for pranks directed at him that seem quite obvious.
Eeron overall shows others that he is a nice person, he is a kind and caring individual. He helps others when they are in need, and loves life. He overall is not comfortable watching Hunger Games when they are televised because he is not fond of gore. Eeron is a survivalist though, taking any measures that he sees fit to surviving. The amount of pressure he puts on himself makes it very hard for him to cope with his life, it stresses him beyond relief when he does not perform the best out of anyone, even if it is above his ability, which is why he tends to fail at things he attempts... a lot. He is also too nice to be a good fighter, he always does what is best for others and not for himself. His niceness and gullibility are his two fatal flaws.

History:

Eeron is the oldest of four children. He has one brother and two sisters, the brother is 10 and the two sisters are 11. Sadly, he has been the man of his house ever since he was six when a building collapsed, killing his dad. Eeron has learned to live on the brink of starvation, scouring the streets for the littlest scrap of food.
He has put tessera in since he could, trying to make a better life for his family. He is now an construction worker by night after going to school everyday having almost no time to rest.
Eeron has been on the brink of starvation many times, and he struggles to recall those times even now as his mind has teased them out of his brain. Eeron has came to the aid of his siblings when they have gotten into trouble in school. Eeron is one of the most popular boys in his class, and has had many girlfriends.
His life has been hard, his father was a pretty successful working man, even though he lived on week to week paychecks, but all of that fortune went away when his dad's tragic death happened. He has always had a prominent figure in his life though, once his father died, he looked up to his father's boss, who was not a very nice man. Eeron has tried to become a person with no emotion, but has always failed at it.

Codeword: muttations
Comments/Other:

[Sunrise Rainier D2 // [Thundy]]

Heya, welcome to the site. xD

Before I can accept your character, I need you to change a few things.

1) You have the minimum number of paragraphs, but these paragraphs are very short and they don't tell me much about your character. It would be nice if you could elaborate more on the information that you do have to lengthen your paragraphs. It would also be nice if you added another paragraph to each section- the more information in this case, the better.

2) He seems to lack flaws. The only one that I can really find is that he's gullible, and though that's a huge flaw, it would be nice if he had some more other than that. You say that he puts immense pressure on himself to be the best, though maybe you could edit that a bit and say that it stresses him out a lot? Or maybe he tries to be the best, and fails? (Or, really, you could add both of those things.) You could also tie in the fact that he's gullible with the fact that he's nice- maybe he's too nice for his own good, and coupled with being gullible, it gets him into trouble? You don't have to use these ideas if you feel that they don't fit your character, but you do have to add some flaws.

3) You're missing a few letters from the codeword. (Though I find "Mutatos" amusing 'cause I really want to yell "POTATOES!" at everyone, but no..)

Just fix those things, and then post here again when it's time for someone to check it again.

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[phunke]

Mkay, so you gotta get the codeword. No, we can't PM it to you or tell you in the cbox; you have to legit read the rules until you find it. xD Hey, when Thundy and I were joining back in the olden days the letter's weren't even bolded, just underlined. That was hard to find. But yeah, just go back and reread until you find the codeword. The letters are in order and they spell out a word from the book. ^^

Also, his name is Eeron but in the Name: part of the form it says Arthrax. ?!?!

[phunke]

accepted!