Lynnette Mist [District 12][DONE]

[Akkure]

Name: Lynnette Mist
Age: 15
Gender: Female
District/Area: District 12
Appearance:

Personality:

Lynnette is absent-minded, hands down. She can forget where she's going, while she's going there! She can be easily distracted by the smallest of things, but that makes her very awarwe of her surroundings. She runs even the smallest of details through her mind(even though she tends to forget them) by habit.

Lynnette has a naturally outgoing personality, and can be a very generous person; looking after others more than she'd herself, but with that she can be a bit too open, and tends to share alot of things that would usually be kept more secretive or revealed later on in a relationship.

Lynnette loves fish, of almost any kind. She's not that big on eating sweets, but most of all she finds vegetables revolting. She loves birds and enjoys places that have an abundance of them.

History:

Lynette was born and raised in District 12 her entire life. She grew up with her mother Etna, her older sister Elorna, and her younger sister Elise. Lynette never knew her father; according to her mother, he died when Elorna was still young. Lynette usually helped her mother in the kitchen while Elorna prefered working out in the mines.
Lynnette and Elise attend the school in District 12 and everyday after they would play together. For her 14th birthday, Lynnette recived a special satin ribbon from her mother, that belonged to her grandmother when she was young. Only weeks later, Lynnette, Lynn for short, and Elise were watching Elorna and the others near the mines when it caved in, taking the life of Elorna.

Since then Elise became more of a loner then anything else; pushing herself away from everyone around her and became quiet. Despite this, she'd still make small conversation with Lynn and looked to her as the person she could turn to. Lynn on the other hand, tried to keep her head up in hopes that her sister Elise would do the same. Their mother became more of a worker and began having less and less time for Lynn and Elise, since Elorna was the main one making the small income for the family.

One day, Elise and Lynn were straying too far from home when they were attacked by an older man. He took Elise and threatened to kill her if Lynn didn't give him all she had. Lynn bent down to pick up her things she had just gotten from the hub; while she did she also secretly scooped a handfull of dirt. She sprawled it into his eyes and Elise managed to wiggle out of his grasp and out of reach of the knife he had to her throat. Lynn took Elise by the hand and made a run for it, but not before the man had cut over her upper back. Weakly, they escaped. The man pursued them, but the closer they made it back to home the more he began moving away. Etna treated Lynn to the best of her abilities; the small knowlege of medicine from her grandmother, and was able to close up the wound. It left a light, noticeable, long scar reaching from her shoulder down to the middle of her back. Since then Lynn has been reluctant to stray from home, yet she found one spot that interested her. A small pond that were inhabited by birds and a few butterflies; her small oasis where she could feel the best. Each day after school she would go there and stay there for hours. Neither Etna or Elise know of this secluded spot.

Codeword: odair
Comments/Other:

This is my first post. Sorry if it's a bit rugged >.<

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Okay, you’re off to a great start!

First off, she needs to, um... actually have an appearance section, not just a picture. The site minimums for bios are 2 paragraphs of appearance, 3 paragraphs of personality, and 3 paragraphs of history. Keep in mind that a paragraph is considered to be 5 good, well-constructed sentences. Keep in mind while writing her appearance that you need to give her some appearance flaws, just one or two are fine. Stringy hair, smelly feet, warts, acne, dry skin, the possibilities are literally endless. Keep in mind that scars do not count as flaws unless they’re particularly grotesque. A “flawless” character isn’t likely to exist unless they’re in the Capitol, and requiring physical flaws helps us avoid Mary-Sues/Gary-Stus.

More detail on the personality! This is the most important part of your bio because it really gives the description of who your character is at their core. Put as much detail here as you possibly can; there’s nothing too insignificant! Think about why she is the way she is (this usually becomes evident in the history section) and go as deep into her head as you can!

Really expand on her history! Go into deep detail about her relationships with family and friends, and examine how her past has affected her as a person. Generally the personality and history sections of a bio are very heavily dependent on each other, so reference both of these sections at once!

Overall, I just need more detail on everything before I can accept her. Please make the requested changes and post back here when you’re done, and I’ll have another look at her!