Madison Flowers 3

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Madison Flowers District Three

The story starts when it was hot and it was summer and...
I had it all, I had him right there where I wanted him
She came along, got him alone and let's hear the applause
She took him faster than you could say "sabotage"

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Name Madison Flowers

I never saw it coming, wouldn't have suspected it
I underestimated just who I was dealing with
She had to know the pain was beating on me like a drum
She underestimated just who she was stealing from

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Age 17

She's not a saint
And she's not what you think
She's an actress, whoa
She's better known
For the things that she does
On the mattress, whoa
Soon she's gonna find
Stealing other people's toys
On the playground won't
Make you many friends
She should keep in mind
She should keep in mind
There is nothing I do better than revenge

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Gender Female

She looks at life like it's a party and she's on the list
She looks at me like I'm a trend and she's so over it
I think her ever-present frown is a little troubling
And she thinks I'm psycho 'cause I like to rhyme her name with things

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District/Area District 3

But sophistication isn't what you wear or who you know
Or pushing people down to get you where you wanna go
They wouldn't teach you that in prep school so it's up to me
But no amount of vintage dresses gives you dignity

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Appearance

Madison’s fluffy, long, brown hair is commonly covering her deep brown eyes. Above them are small, plucked eyebrows. Her lips are small, pink and empty. She has freckles in all the right places, which fit perfectly on her pale white skin. Her face is thin and long. She has a small nose, slim nose. Her ears are also small and covered by hair.

Madison is very skinny, only weighing 98 lbs. Her arms are fragile, but her legs carry some—but little—muscle. Her hands are smooth and move with confidence. Her feet are the most tan part of her, and you can see where her flip flops lay. Tattooed on her left shoulder blade is a small butterfly with blue wings. Her clothes are tights and her pants are ripped--even at the reaping.

She's not a saint
And she's not what you think
She's an actress, whoa
She's better known
For the things that she does
On the mattress, whoa
Soon she's gonna find
Stealing other people's toys
On the playground won't
Make you many friends
She should keep in mind
She should keep in mind
There is nothing I do better than revenge

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Personality

Madison is a very rebellious teenager. She thinks she can do what she wants, when she wants to do it. She's carefree and irresponsible. She makes herself dumb to appeal to more guys. Her humor is sarcastic and cruel. Fear, is not a word in her vocabulary. She has the mindset that everything will turn out good for her one way or another.

Her sexual integrity is at an all time low. Her classmates have truthfully labeled her a harlot. Most of her friends are guys. She cannot stand most of the girls in her district and laughs hysterically when their reaped. All in all, she is a very hateful person. She knows this, and realizes herself to be a selfish whore.

Madison is what you call a fake. The way she acts changes around who she is around. She is a snot to other girls, she's sweet and flirtatious to the boys, and flat out rude to authority figure. She is ruthless and dismissive of other peoples feelings. She's not shy, and outspoken. When someone challenges her to fight, she won't back down.

I'm just another thing for you
To roll your eyes at, honey
You might have him but haven't you heard
I'm just another thing for you
To roll your eyes at, honey
You might have him but I always get the last word
Whoa

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History

Madison was born to teen parents who did not know how to raise a kid, so her grandmother did most of it. Her father secretly raped her from the time she was a baby till she was about 10. They kept her silent with jewelry. She did not come from a poor family. Madison never knew what love really was. She thought it was sex and money.

Soon after Madison became a teenager she began secretly selling herself to boys at school. She thought she was going to lose it because of her weight, so she stopped eating. She rarely eats, and never in front of people. She has been extremely lucky in not getting pregnant.

Madison began to get bad relationships with girls at school. She became drama educed, her grades dropped ultimately, she got in fights almost every day, and continued to do the only thing she thought would bring her love—sex. Her father committed suicide when she was 14, and she refused to speak to her mother. Her grandmother had an unconditional love for Madison but only thought she could show it through money. The money they had went to waste and they lost it. Madison’s mom and grandparents is now dependant on Madison to bring in money she gets from the boys. There is a hole in Madison’s heart, just dying to be filled with love. Real love.

She's not a saint
And she's not what you think
She's an actress, whoa
She's better known
For the things that she does
On the mattress, whoa
Soon she's gonna find
Stealing other people's toys
On the playground won't
Make you many friends
She should keep in mind
She should keep in mind
There is nothing I do better than revenge

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Comments/Other

Lyrics-Better than revenge by Taylor Swift

[Sunrise Rainier D2 // [Thundy]]

Hi there. ^^ So, I feel like you have enough sentences here, but a lot of your sentences are short and choppy, specifically in the appearance and personality sections. You could easily add more length to this app by giving it more variation and detail. Perhaps start out with rewording sentences so they don't always begin with "She is" or "[insert body part here] is/are... " and then expanding?

If she's anorexic, she would have lots of health issues related to that. You also describe her as "extremely skinny" but her BMI is actually only a little bit under the normal weight category. And, I mean, for a mental disorder, you sure don't elaborate much on it, which makes me believe this is just a random detail you threw in to make her seem more tragic on top of heralready gruesome history. So here's what I'm going to say:

• Remove the part about her being "extremely skinny" because she isn't. Or else lower her weight a tad, I suppose.
  
  
• Either remove the anorexia entirely or justify it with great detail.
  

I think that's it. ^^ Post here to bump up the thread once you're done editing!

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[No tribute[Bray]]

Okay, I ficed the mistakes--I think.

[Sunrise Rainier D2 // [Thundy]]

I still think you need to add a few more sentences each to the appearance and personality -- there's not enough detail backing up the basic information.

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[No tribute[Bray]]

Okayy, I put more, hopefully I got it to where it needs to be..

[Sunrise Rainier D2 // [Thundy]]

I'm sorry. </3 It doesn't seem like you added much from the last time. Try for 3 more sentences in the appearance and 3 more in the personality. ^^ And not short "She is.." sentences either. Try for longer, more detailed ones. What does she think of herself? Why is she the way that she is? Ask yourself questions to answer, and you'll get there.

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[No tribute[Bray]]

Okayy, this time I think, I finally got it down..

[Sunrise Rainier D2 // [Thundy]]

Accepted!

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